I am a girl. My name is Li Ling. I’m in Class Three, Grade Five. I’m helpful at home. I can water the flowers, empty the trash and sweep the floor. After meals, I can help my mother do the dishes. On Sunday, I can wash the clothes. What about you? Are you helpful, too?
【要領(lǐng)點(diǎn)評】
本篇作文的題目是“我可以幫助做家務(wù)”,作者主要敘述自己在家?guī)椭龅氖虑椋榻B自己的名字,所在年級及在家能做的家務(wù),很詳細(xì),到位。
小朋友們在寫作時(shí),應(yīng)盡量寫一些親自經(jīng)歷的事情,這樣會(huì)避免在作文時(shí)顯得太空,因?yàn)橹挥凶约航?jīng)常做的事情印象才會(huì)特別深刻。寫作時(shí)還要注意大小寫和時(shí)態(tài)。