I’ve got a lovely friend at school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. I’m 11. He’s older than me. He’s 150 cm tall. I’m 148 cm. He’s taller and stronger. He’s 43 kg and I’m 41 kg. He’s heavier. We’ve got round faces and short hair. But my eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our favourite colours are white and blue. We like summer best. We both like sports, too. On Saturdays, we play table tennis. On Sundays, we play basketball. He’s good at basketball. But I do better at table tennis. We laugh and play together. How happy we are!
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寫(xiě)法:這篇作文的題目是“我的朋友和我”。既然寫(xiě)作范圍是兩個(gè)人物,就要筆墨均勻,兩者缺一不可。不能只描寫(xiě)朋友,也不能只敘述我。這無(wú)形中增加了寫(xiě)作的難度。解決這個(gè)難點(diǎn)的關(guān)鍵是:找出兩個(gè)人幾方面的異同??梢酝ㄟ^(guò)常見(jiàn)的年齡、身高、體重、外貌、喜好等方面列舉出每個(gè)人的具體實(shí)際情況,再進(jìn)行比較,通過(guò)比較突出每個(gè)人物的特點(diǎn)。這樣就把人物活靈活現(xiàn)的展現(xiàn)給讀者了。 時(shí)態(tài):像此類題目的作文,運(yùn)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)即可。
句型:因?yàn)樯婕皟蓚€(gè)人的比較,不要忘記使用比較級(jí)句型:A+be+比較級(jí)+than+B。
注意:在列舉兩個(gè)人的“體貌、喜好”等方面情況時(shí),應(yīng)一邊列舉,一邊比較。不要一味指出不同,還要列舉相同之處。兩人能成為朋友,一定有共同語(yǔ)言和喜好,共性不容忽視。在表達(dá)喜好時(shí),不同的句型應(yīng)交叉運(yùn)用,避免枯燥的重復(fù)。例“Our favourite colours are„”,“We like „best”,“We both like„,too”,為突出不同時(shí)間做不同運(yùn)動(dòng),用“On Saturdays„”,“On Sundays„”,形成鮮明對(duì)比。常使用并列連詞and 和轉(zhuǎn)折連詞 but ,使文章讀起來(lái)更流暢。結(jié)尾以How happy we are!突出了兩人從友誼中得到的快樂(lè)!